Tuesday, June 12, 2012

Blog #13

Script Frenzy Project Reflection Paper
Trevor Canham

            Recently in Creative Writing class, my peers and I recently underwent the challenge of Script Frenzy. This is a 30 day challenge in which we were to plan out and write a script that was long enough to meet or exceed a page count that we set in the beginning of the year.
            When we first discussed the project I thought it was going to be an interesting and exciting concept and I was looking forward to beginning the process. I was interested in the thought of writing out a script and it seemed as though the possibilities were endless, being allowed to write almost any type of script on almost any topic that we could possibly think of. It was exciting to think of how the final project was going to turn out. Now that the project is over, I still feel that it was an interesting project, I just wish it focused more on the content of the project rather than the page count. I often found myself putting the length of the script over the overall quality of it and would sometimes sacrifice that to add length to the piece.
            In the beginning of the project we were given a planning workbook which outlined the elements of a script including dialogue, formatting and the workbook gave us a template in which to write our script by and required us to outline our script. The parts of the workbook that were the most helpful to me were the parts which showed us what to include in an outline of the script and how to outline characters. These parts really helped me with the script because they allowed me to plan out the script before writing it, which I am quite glad I did, rather than just bombing into the script with no sense of direction. The parts of the packet that I found the least helpful were the outlines that showed us where we should include each and every milestone in our script. I believe that these parts were a little too rigid for a project with such a wide variety of options and I did not find them to be particularly helpful.
           When given projects of great magnitude, one usually finds out a thing or two about themselves as a worker, writer, or whatever depending on what the project entails. At least to me, an 80 page script is a fairly large task and I believe I learned a few things about myself while writing it. One of the biggest things that I learned about myself was that I need to learn how to plan things out more before I start doing them. In this project, I had a beginning plan, but all of the details of it seemed very hazy to me and it made it extremely hard to write out the middle parts of the script when I didn't really know where I was going with it exactly. Also, my partner and I didn't really stick to the plan that we had created and I believe that also added to the trouble that we had with our script.
            Our final script ended up being about 25 pages, which was just over 25% of our final goal which was 80 pages. I believe that I handled time management in this project very badly. During the beginning of the project I don't think I really realized the amount of work that would have to be done everyday in order to complete the project, and it was during this beginning period that I most definitely did not handle the project very well. Although I started off pretty badly in the area of time management, I spent the last few weeks of doing the project trying to get as much done as I possibly could, which was probably a result of my slacking during the first part of the project.
            Upon completing the script, I cannot say that I am really happy with it, being that it is unfinished and I never really thought there was a lot that was very strong about it in the first place. Nonetheless, there are still some things about my script that I do consider strong and that I am proud of. One of these things is in some parts of the script, I liked the way I was able to show how I wanted the characters to think or feel in my head through their dialogue or actions. That was one thing that I had no idea how I was going to be able to do in the beginning of the process and I was proud that I was somewhat able to accomplish. Another part of my script that I was proud of were some of scenes in which I was able to accomplish the goal of communicating a plot element that I wanted to include in my script.
           With my strengths said, I believe that my script contained many weaknesses. One of the biggest weaknesses that I believe my script contained was interesting or realistic dialogue. In some of the scenes, I was not able to create dialogue that would be realistic or interesting or I just didn't feel like I had time to think about it. Another weakness  that I think I had in my script was the ability to create an emotionally moving scene. During some of the more emotional scenes I thought they would be way more intense and sad than they really were, and upon re-reading them, I realized that they weren't very moving at all they were just really dramatic. Finally, I think our biggest problem in the script was not being able to realize exactly where we were going with each scene, which created the product of scenes that may be completely pointless and that did not go anywhere. For all of these reasons, I would need much more time for editing and improvement.
            If I were to have more time to work on my script I would most definitely restart it completely. I would try to plan it out more adequately and I would possibly change the subject matter of the script to something that I could better relate too or picture in my head. I believe that when we first started the planning process of the script we just chose an idea that was really sort of complex and we would have needed to put a lot more thought and time into the project to complete it to our satisfaction.
            Overall, I honestly found this project very rewarding and challenging. I just wish, now that I look back at it, that I took it a little bit more seriously and put a bit more time and effort into the project and I really could have created a piece that I was really proud of and that I enjoyed. I am honestly glad that we were given a chance to work on such a large project with the freedom that we were allowed and I really learned a lot about script writing from it. Although I didn't quite finish mine I can at least say I attempted to write a screenplay, and someday I hope that I will be able to complete one.
             On a side note, I truly enjoyed taking part in a creative writing class and I really learned a lot from the class, and not just about writing but I have found that some of the concepts that we were taught were useful in other creative processes such as music composition. I am glad that I was able to take something from the class and I hope I can take a class as rewarding as this one in the future.

Sincerely,
Trevor Canham

           


Blog #12

Scene Reflection:

             After having peers review one of the scenes from the script that my partner and I wrote, I was able to take a deeper look into my scene writing and the aspects of the scene. After looking through my scene I found some things that I was definitely proud of and that I believed were the strengths of the scene, but I also found some things that were clear weaknesses in the scene. Although there were aspects of the scene that I believe  we excelled in, I also believe that there were a few things that we could improve on if we had the time to re-write it.
             I believe that the scene my partner and I wrote contained several elements that were strengths and created a positive effect in our script. One strength of the scene was characterization of the teacher character in the scene, through his actions. In the scene, the teacher embarrasses Baxter in front of his classmates without thinking about it. Another strength that I believe our scene had were the elements that progress the plot of the story. In the scene a series of bad things happen to Baxter which convince him that he needs the make a change in his life. I also believe that we created understandable dialogue in our scene.
            Although there were some strengths in our scene, I also believe that our scene had some clear weaknesses. One of these weaknesses was the excitement of the scene which, after reading David's scene, proved to be truly lacking. Also, I believe that we could have wrote more interesting and clever dialogue. Finally, I believe the aspect that our scene was the most lacking was scene description. I believe that we should have included more description of the school, the room, and most importantly, the characters.
            If we were to have more time to re-write our script, there would be some changes and additions that I would definitely like to see. First off, I would like to add more description to our scene. I would try to better describe the setting and various characters in the scene. This would allow the reader to better visualize the scene while reading. Second, I would like to spice up the dialogue with some more exciting dialogue. I believe the dialogue in the scene is a little dry and a little bit of pizzazz wouldn't hurt. Finally, if I could rewrite the scene,  I would try to make more interesting characters.

-Trevor Canham


Thursday, April 26, 2012

Blog #11

Caroline Hess and Trevor Canham
BLOG #11


INT. WILMONT HIGH SCHOOL – HIGH SCHOOL – DAYTIME

It is a Monday morning, and everyone is bustling to get to their next class. BAXTER is walking alone in the halls, face down, until KENNETH comes running toward him. They stop at BAXTER’S locker to have a quick chat.


KENNETH
Baxter! Before the bell rings I need to show you the tickets my dad bought me and him for the concert next Saturday! I can’t believe they already came! I mean, my dad just ordered them and they’re already here! I’m so excited!

KENNETH pulls two TICKETS out of his backpack.

BAXTER
Oh, wow. That sounds really fun.

KENNETH
(Not noticing the change in his friend’s behavior) I’m so excited…I wish we could take you but it’s more of a son- father bonding thing, you know how those things go. Shoot, I think I forgot a book in my locker. I’ll see you later on the bus!

BAXTER
Oh…alright, I might see you later I have some things to do after school

 Baxter is in a daze the whole day. His teachers call on him and he does not know what they are discussing. Finally the last bell rings and Baxter gets on the bus. When he gets home he opens his garage. He sees two fishing poles and shows a look of determination. He grabs the poles and leaves the garage.

Wednesday, April 25, 2012

Blog #10

Caroline Hess and Trevor Canham
Blog #10

KENNETH
Baxter! Before the bell rings I need to show you the tickets my dad bought me and him for the concert next Saturday! I can’t believe they already came! I mean, my dad just ordered them and they’re already here! I’m so excited!

BAXTER
Oh, wow. That sounds really fun.

KENNETH
(Not noticing the change in his friend’s behavior) I’m so excited…I wish we could take you but it’s more of a son- father bonding thing, you know how those things go. Shoot, I think I forgot a book in my locker. I’ll see you on the bus!

BAXTER
Oh…alright, I might see you later I have some things to do after school

Baxter then goes home on the bus. He opens his garage to let himself in the house. Two fishing poles catch his eye. He remembers being like Kenneth, his father’s only son and proud of it. Now he realizes he wishes his dad had not left without even a real goodbye. He drops his bag and grabs the fishing pole and heads to the pond.

BLOG #9

Caroline Hess and Trevor Canham
Blog #9

JANICE
(sigh) Baxter, what do you want for breakfast? I have to get going soon and I am already rushing.

BAXTER
(shrugs) Do you really care...? I’ll just make something for myself after I pack my bag.

JANICE
Baxter, you cannot just shut me out like that…I’m trying my best to provide for you and if you don’t like that then I’m sorry! Now go upstairs and get ready for school. We’re leaving in ten minutes.
BAXTER
Just forget it, I’m not even hungry anyways.
 

Friday, April 20, 2012

Blog #8

Three important facts about dialogue:
1. Dialogue can be a good way and is what is usually used to show what characters are like in a script.

2. Dialogue should reveal character's relationships to one another, and/or move the story forward

3. Dialogue  should be eventful and entertaining

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Blog #7


Caroline Hess and Trevor Canham Blog #7

Opening Scene: There is a road heading towards a sunrise with peacefully swaying grass beside it. This setting is calm and a small bug flutters by. A man and his young son stand hand in hand looking ahead at the horizon. Although they say nothing, the man looks at his son and begins to run away from the boy. Looking scared and confused, the boy chases after him but goes nowhere. The man runs out of sight and is gone. The young boy looks hopelessly at the sky as it begins to turn a misty gray. This picture fades out and now is focused on the same boy, only now he is in his bed. The audience now realizes what happened previously to this boy was a dream. The boy sighs, turns off his blaring alarm clock, and stumbles out of bed.

Setting Up The Story: Because Baxter’s father abandoned the family he feels lonely and insecure as well as hopeless because he has given up on the fact that he will ever return. Baxter’s Mom is very busy with work, mostly to keep her mind off her failed marriage. During Baxter’s time at school he avoids confrontation with other people except for his friend Kenneth.

Inciting Incident: One day Baxter is in school on a particularly bad day and is contemplating his life and the situation he is in. He thinks about all of his problems and he decides that the most prominent one is the guilt that he feels for his father leaving and his family breaking apart. He goes home after school and goes through his garage and finds his old fishing pole that he used to use with his dad when he was still around and he decides that he’s going to take it out and go fishing at the old pond that his father and he used to go to. Baxter heads down to the dock and sits on the edge and casts out his line. He waits awhile but he suddenly notices that a huge fish is near his line and he leans over to take a look. The fish quickly grabs his line and Baxter, being as light as he is falls into the water. He falls headfirst and hits a rock and is immediately knocked out. Luckily a passerby saw the event and jumped in and saved Baxter but unfortunately Baxter was without oxygen for too long and went into a coma. He is brought to the Hospital and his mother and grandfather stay with him there.