Scene Reflection:
After having peers review one of the scenes from the script that my partner and I wrote, I was able to take a deeper look into my scene writing and the aspects of the scene. After looking through my scene I found some things that I was definitely proud of and that I believed were the strengths of the scene, but I also found some things that were clear weaknesses in the scene. Although there were aspects of the scene that I believe we excelled in, I also believe that there were a few things that we could improve on if we had the time to re-write it.
I believe that the scene my partner and I wrote contained several elements that were strengths and created a positive effect in our script. One strength of the scene was characterization of the teacher character in the scene, through his actions. In the scene, the teacher embarrasses Baxter in front of his classmates without thinking about it. Another strength that I believe our scene had were the elements that progress the plot of the story. In the scene a series of bad things happen to Baxter which convince him that he needs the make a change in his life. I also believe that we created understandable dialogue in our scene.
Although there were some strengths in our scene, I also believe that our scene had some clear weaknesses. One of these weaknesses was the excitement of the scene which, after reading David's scene, proved to be truly lacking. Also, I believe that we could have wrote more interesting and clever dialogue. Finally, I believe the aspect that our scene was the most lacking was scene description. I believe that we should have included more description of the school, the room, and most importantly, the characters.
If we were to have more time to re-write our script, there would be some changes and additions that I would definitely like to see. First off, I would like to add more description to our scene. I would try to better describe the setting and various characters in the scene. This would allow the reader to better visualize the scene while reading. Second, I would like to spice up the dialogue with some more exciting dialogue. I believe the dialogue in the scene is a little dry and a little bit of pizzazz wouldn't hurt. Finally, if I could rewrite the scene, I would try to make more interesting characters.
-Trevor Canham
After having peers review one of the scenes from the script that my partner and I wrote, I was able to take a deeper look into my scene writing and the aspects of the scene. After looking through my scene I found some things that I was definitely proud of and that I believed were the strengths of the scene, but I also found some things that were clear weaknesses in the scene. Although there were aspects of the scene that I believe we excelled in, I also believe that there were a few things that we could improve on if we had the time to re-write it.
I believe that the scene my partner and I wrote contained several elements that were strengths and created a positive effect in our script. One strength of the scene was characterization of the teacher character in the scene, through his actions. In the scene, the teacher embarrasses Baxter in front of his classmates without thinking about it. Another strength that I believe our scene had were the elements that progress the plot of the story. In the scene a series of bad things happen to Baxter which convince him that he needs the make a change in his life. I also believe that we created understandable dialogue in our scene.
Although there were some strengths in our scene, I also believe that our scene had some clear weaknesses. One of these weaknesses was the excitement of the scene which, after reading David's scene, proved to be truly lacking. Also, I believe that we could have wrote more interesting and clever dialogue. Finally, I believe the aspect that our scene was the most lacking was scene description. I believe that we should have included more description of the school, the room, and most importantly, the characters.
If we were to have more time to re-write our script, there would be some changes and additions that I would definitely like to see. First off, I would like to add more description to our scene. I would try to better describe the setting and various characters in the scene. This would allow the reader to better visualize the scene while reading. Second, I would like to spice up the dialogue with some more exciting dialogue. I believe the dialogue in the scene is a little dry and a little bit of pizzazz wouldn't hurt. Finally, if I could rewrite the scene, I would try to make more interesting characters.
-Trevor Canham
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